Storyboard!

The group worked on and agreed our storyboard today! Drawing skills aren't fantastic, but at least tyheir clear and we all know what we mean!..

FINAL SCRIPT

Here's the final script for our film DEADLY ENVY...

We decided not to put Sahar in our film as she doesn't fit the role because she looks too young and we would preferably use someone else as she is part of our group. We found someone to play CLARA Watson.


SCRIPT: DEADLY ENVY

CAST:
Richard Parker as JOE Watson

Jakki Elliot as SARAH Daniels

Monique Fearon as CAPTOR

Karishma Halai as CLARA Watson

Shakira Watson as ALICE Watson


INT. OFFICE

(Very gentle background music – Piano solo)

There are two desks side by side and a computer on each. There is a swivel chair tucked under SARAH’s desk, which is neat and tidy with only a few papers out of place. SARAH’s desk has a feminine item to indicate that the desk is a female’s, possibly a pink pencil case or pencil/pen. JOE’s desk is fairly tidy with a few papers out of place and some post-it notes on the bottom of his screen. Next to JOE’s computer monitor there is a school photo of his daughter Clara, which the audience can see.

JOE Watson is sitting at his desk, staring intently at the computer screen. The scene changes, and we focus on what is being shown on the PC monitor.


EXT. DARK ALLEY/ INT. DARK ROOM

(no music) Dark room/alley is fairly empty and spacious, across the room/space in the centre CLARA is sat down on the floor in clear view, with her arms and feet tied together. ALICE is bound as well as gagged, and is sitting in a dark corner in the shadows. We can’t see her face.

The CAPTOR walks slowly towards CLARA, who is struggling against her bindings. The audience hear ALICE whimpering loudly, in horror and fearing for her daughter’s life. CAPTOR comes to a halt before CLARA, and we see the knife she has in her hand. The CAPTOR then slowly bends before CLARA bringing herself to a point just above CLARA’s head. The knife hand extends, towards CLARA while she looks desperate and whimpers.

CLARA: Please. Don’t. Please.

(We can hear ALICE whimpering through her gag in the background)

It seems like CLARA knows the CAPTOR, or recognizes them. She silently begs for mercy. The CAPTOR places the knife, point-forward, gently to CLARA’s cheek. We see a tear roll down CLARA’s cheek.

BLACKOUT


INT. OFFICE

(no music)

JOE is in tears, fixedly watching the screen in disbelief. SARAH’s hands slip over his shoulders in an attempt to reassure him. Standing behind him she looks anxiously at the computer screen and then back down at JOE, also in apparent disbelief.

SARAH: Joe…

JOE shoves the chair back, now extremely angry, and shoves SARAH away, unfocused on his surroundings. He storms out of the room. SARAH watches him leave, expressionless, and the door slams shut.

BLACKOUT

New and Improved Edited Script

Sahar as our script writer finally drafted the script for our groups film and sent it to us. I had the role of Script editor and edited to improve it, so here it is....

DEADLY ENVY

CAST:
Mr. Parker as JOE Watson

Jackki Elliot as SARAH Daniels and CAPTOR

______________ as CLARA Watson

Sahar Badruddin as ALICE Watson



INT. OFFICE
(Very gentle background music – Piano solo)

The scene starts in Detective JOE WATSON’s and SARAH’s DANIELS’ office down at the police station. There are two desks side by side and computer on each. There is a swivel chair tucked under SARAH’s desk which is neat and tidy with only a few papers out of place, SARAH’s desk has feminine item to indicate the other desk is a females possibly a pink pencil case or pencil/pen. JOE’s desk is fairly tidy with a few papers out of place and some possibly post-it notes on the bottom of his screen. Next to JOE’s computer monitor there is a school photo of his daughter Clara, which the viewer will possibly see.

JOE Watson is sitting at his desk with his hand on the mouse, staring intently at the computer screen.



EXT. DARK ALLEY/ INT. DARK ROOM

(no music)

Dark room/alley/area is fairly empty and spacious, across the room/space in the centre CLARA is sat down on the floor in clear view with her arms and feet tied together. ALICE WATSON is also tied up by her hands and feet, sat in a dark corner in the shadows, she has also been gaged.

The CAPTOR walks slowly towards CLARA who is struggling against her bindings. The audience see ALICE bound and gagged, in horror fearing for her daughter. CAPTOR comes to a halt before CLARA, and we see the knife she has in her hand. The CAPTOR then slowly bends before CLARA bringing herself to a point just above the CLARA’s head.

The knife hand extends, towards CLARA while she looks desperate and whimpers.

CLARA: Please. Don’t. Please.

(We can hear ALICE whimpering through her gag in the background)

It seems like CLARA knows the CAPTOR, or recognizes them. She silently begs for mercy. The CAPTOR places knife gently to CLARA’s cheek.

BLACKOUT



INT. OFFICE

(no music)

JOE is in tears still fixedly watching the screen in disbelief. SARAH’s hands slip over his shoulders in attempt to reassure him. Stood behind him she looks anxiously at the computer screen and then sympathetically back down at JOE.

SARAH: Joe…

JOE shoves the chair back, now extremely angry and pushes SARAH away. He storms out of the room. SARAH stricken with concern watches him leave and the door slams shut.

Gradual BLACKOUT

Script!

Our group now has a 1st script for our Thriller film: DEADLY ENVY.

CAST:
Mr. Parker as JOE Watson

Jackki Elliot as SARAH Daniels and CAPTOR

______?________ as CLARA Watson

Sahar Badruddin as ALICE Watson

SCRIPT

INT. OFFICE

(Very gentle background music – Piano solo)

JOE Watson is sitting on his desk staring intently at the computer screen. Close up of him, then quick shot of screen, where we see everything is dark. The scene changes.
EXT. DARK ALLEY/ INT. DARK ROOM

(no music)

Close up of CAPTOR, walking quietly towards CLARA who is struggling against her bindings. The shot extends, where we see ALICE bound and gagged, horror in her eyes for her daughter.

CAPTOR comes to a halt before CLARA, close up of the knife which we now see is in its hand. Then it slowly bends to bring itself to a point just above the girl’s head.

The knife hand extends, while CLARA looks desperate and whimpers.

CLARA: Please. Don’t. Please.

(We can hear ALICE whimpering in the background)

It seems like she knows the CAPTOR, or recognizes it. She silently begs for mercy.

CAPTOR places knife gently to CLARA’s cheek, and the scene fades to black.

INT. OFFICE

(no music)

Close up of JOE, tears in his eyes, disbelieving expression on his face. We see hands slip onto his shoulders, reassuring, feminine. The shot extends, and we see SARAH anxious, looking at the monitor.

SARAH: Joe…

Costumes!!

Detective 1: Joe Waston - Our main protagonist we decided to give him a trench coat similar to detectives in the classical thrillers. 

 Detective 2: Sarah Daniels - Our protagonists accomplice...! Although a formal female detective she is an attractive one often trying to subtly seduce and distract Detective Watson having an ongoing and secretly obsessive crush on him...

 Captor (unknown) - The thrillers mystery antagonist..

 Alice and Clara Watson - Detective Watson's family who are kidnapped! Clara being portrayed as a  normal young teen wears clothes in trend and expected of her age group - skinny jeans being one of them. This is in order for the audience to identify and empathise with her. Alice wears a blouse and jeans for the same reason, being portrayed as a normal person like anyone watching the movie, who is thrown into this disastrous situation.

Deadly Envy Teaser 2!

Here's our new and improved Deadly Envy teaser.

We decide to go with this one because:

• The colour connotations of green and red for the last Teaser implied something about Christmas to some audiences.
• Also to some audiences the music didn't sound like it was for a thriller film, to some it sounded like it just didn't suit the teaser and perhaps could be used later in the film, but just not for the first impressions for a teaser. Some felt it better suited an action film and drew attention away from what was on the visuals.

To improve it this time we...

1. Changed the colour scheme to just black and red to convey that sense of danger.
2. We cut the music and changed it to more sinister sounds to make it stand in their minds and cause them to question what is happening, hopefully persuading them to go and see our film.

Shutter Island

Today I watched the Leonardo DiCaprio film, Shutter Island, directed by Martin Scoresese. It is a psychological thriller set in the 1950s about a mental ex-U.S marshal Andrew Laeddis (DiCaprio) who creates a scenario in his mind that he is Edward "Teddy" Daniels. A federal agent who goes to secluded mental institute to find out about a missing patient Rachel Solando, but grows to believe he has stumbled upon a US government conspiracy of barbarically torturing patients to control their minds. Throughout the film the audience follow Daniels (DiCaprio) believing his life is reality as he looks for Solando, Laeddis and attempts to get into the lighthouse where he believes they are carrying out the experiments. The twist at the end then throws the audience as we discover all of it wasn't real and that Daniels who is actually Laeddis himself is a mental patient at the institute; who has created this situation and fake persona using parts, events and names in his own life, due to him not being able to come to terms with him killing his wife. All the staff at the institute played along only revealing it to him at the end when his suspicions aren't confirmed about the conspiracy in order to see if this would work as a cure for him. In the end although he realises and the audience see what really happened, it begins all over again in his brain for him, and he is taken away to have a lobotomy. This was a very effective psychological thriller as although he was not diagnosed as mental for a majority of the film the audience had an inkling that he was going mad through his hallucinations and dreams. Being in this mental institute built suspense as you never knew what these people were going to do especially when there was the break out, and with even the staff under suspicion, Daniels can trust no one.